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Re: MAPS!
Thank you! I wrote everything in pencil so that it could be edited, and I'd probably add color in the final draft. However, as I said at the beginning, these ...
Feb 17, 2011 -
Re: Love Poem(s) [WIP]
Okay, officially trashing No. 2 ;) I've created a new stanza for No. 1. The rhythm is different, though: In my hope to keep your heart, I’ll be sincerely true. ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: MAPS!
These are some maps for my planned novel trilogy, the Chronicles of Flaughston. I spent countless weeks drawing, editing, revising, and re-revising these, and they are "living" maps, meaning they ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: A Letter to Pedantic Americans
America will change its measurement system when Britain converts to Euros :P Why all this negativity? World diversity is awesome. Do we all need the same measurement system? What's next, ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Domes and Wastelands
An excellent bit of reasoning sir! I, too have my doubts about what you refer to as a "domed lifestyle". Even if a terrible natural or man-made disaster were to ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Heart Cloud on Valentine's Day
Eh, yeah. I like the unedited version better, and it's kind've confusing because it doesn't really look much like a heart :P Still, you tried, and it's better than I ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Lake Side
GREAT work! I especially liked the third photo. I urge you to continue developing your obvious talents with the camera :D
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Full Moon Battle
I think it looks pretty good, though the blurry lines rather messed up my impression as well. Otherwise, a bang up job! Kudos to you ;) P.S.- This is coming ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: The "I'm Back" Thread
WHOOPS! Guess I didn't see this thread... O_o
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Love Poem(s) [WIP]
I have recently begun composing some poems for a girl that I like xD These are IN THE MAKING, so don't expect masterpieces. Yet. ;) (btw, I haven't yet named ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Begin.
Marvelous! Simply exquisite! I quite enjoyed reading this poem, and it conveys images stupendously. Many poems, even those written by celebrated authors, are often difficult to read straight through w
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Mystery Man
I like it, except for the line you mentioned. I don't think you should remove it, just see if you can modify it to fit your rhythm better. I noticed ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Progression
I agree with what the others have been saying, and it seems like the rhyming is a little forced. Also (this is merely a personal preference), I have found that, ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: A Patriot
Excellent job! I also noticed the rhyme within the line, but was confused at the "and proud listeners be" area. My biggest suggestion is ADD PUNCTUATION. If you do that, ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: lion&the lamb
It has great potential, as the others have said, though you might want to see if you can expand and make it a bit longer ;) Also, you may want ...
Feb 16, 2011
