FadingBrighter

Just noticed a lot of grammatical errors that ruined the flow of the story. I suggest you go back through and reread what you wrote. I was beginning to know ...

Niyah stood frozen as the others fought. After the strange vision she had just experienced, she could hardly think, let alone move. "Niyah, your crying." Seena said in suprise, Niyah ...

haha, sorry, this next post is pretty random. But I need to get deeper into my characters story. Hope no one minds!

Niyah stopped, the entire world falling away beneath her. That girl. She was a bounty hunter. Everlee sighed, running her fingers through her dark hair, and Seena stood speechless beside ...

Hey Riley, tell me if I portrayed Davnick alright in my last post. I feel like I was walking on the edge . So tell me if you want me ...

The sky was a clear, vivid blue, the sun shining impossibly bright far above. There wasn't a single cloud in sight. The small clearing was surrounded by an impenatrable wall ...

Niyah sat stareing at the tree tops until a pale pink light filtered through between the jade green leaves. She didn't know how long it had been since she'd been ...

Niyah did her best to stay out of the way. She wasn't sure how to react to these strange people. They walked to and fow, like a pack of wild ...

This next part is going to be really depressing; im sorry

Thanks razzle! Hope it's okay how I depicted Davnick. The day had fallen into darkness by the time Niyah finally entered the forest on the outskirts of the city. Night ...

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Razzle, can you somehow manage to get Davnick out into the forest sometime in the near future? Pretty please? You know that idea we discussed today, where niyah runs into ...

Sorry about the length, I just had to get this done and over with so I could join in. This is beginning' Niyah: Broken Girl Niyah stared up at the ...

Hiya! I have gotten special permission from Vuzzy to create and add this character! I've gone through everything with her, so it's all approved! I'm so excited! Name: Niyah Taveon ...

I read the entire story and i liked it alot. I really think you should continue it. i do think it was a tad bit strange that she trusted Raphael ...