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Re: The Reason for Rain: Chapter Four
Sorry it has been so long since my last update, I've been really busy with a huge essay I had to write for National History Day. Maybe this was all ...
Jan 27, 2012 -
Re: She gives
Comments and Corrections in Violet: Walking on the beach, a tall figure I see. (I know you're trying to be creative and figurative, but talking like Yoda is a bit ...
Oct 28, 2011 -
Re: Take Me Higher
I've never written a song before, so I hope it's okay . Without Music it's approximatly 3 min. 10 seconds long with 301 words. (Lead in music begins.) I’m lost ...
Oct 22, 2011 -
Re: The Perished- Prologue
Whoa! That made my heart speed up at the ending! Very intense. I just have a few things to say. Corrections in violet: “Please. Don’t do this. You don’t need ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: Filled
This was I nice poem, but I'd just like to point out a few things. Corrections in violet: My dreams are filled of (Do you mean 'with'?) life and color ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: The Suns Betrayal
This was very good, it reminded me almost of a soap opera . I could really read this poem if you know what I mean. The way you wrote it ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: The Reason for Rain: Chapter Three
I promise the Romance will start next chapeter! Promise. I’d only been to Leigh’s house for family parties, holidays, and things like that. It was always clean and tidy. Everything ...
Oct 16, 2011 -
Re: Mommy didn't care...
This was very emotional and very deep. I for one loved how raw it was and how you really gave us a feel for your poor character. There were a ...
Oct 8, 2011 -
Re: Videotape Chapter One.
I was lost in a world that didn’t accept a girl like me. I got on the train that led to nowhere, a beautiful nowhere for a no one like ...
Oct 6, 2011 -
Re: Separation
I really think it has good intentions, but you started of on a wierd page. You said you were the one torn but the other person's is whole, but the ...
Sep 29, 2011 -
Re: Secrets
Geez, for being so short I didn't know it'd have such a Great impact! I agree with the person above me: Simple, short, and tells a story ! It had ...
Sep 19, 2011 -
Re: Framework
I'm sorry I can't offer you a good feed-back or a even a critque, but I am Speechless ! This was amazing. I don't even know what else to rather ...
Sep 19, 2011 -
Re: I Will Find A Way
They are simple but very cute! I like the one with the cloud heart~
Sep 18, 2011 -
Re: Introduction
You definitly got me excited for this story! It sounds good, I love to read this when you do post it. The only thing I wanted to say was this ...
Sep 18, 2011 -
Re: The Reason for Rain: Chapter Two
Sorry if this story is moving too fast! I'll try and do better with detail in my next chapter. I stood in the threshold of the door looking out into ...
Sep 18, 2011
