Fabien

Don't give any lip, don't be a smart aleck. The shouts get louder, veins bulging in his neck. Hold your head up high, Swallow hard, and look him in the ...

Very lovely, very vivid, very soothing. Your lines are filled with words that blossomed into beautiful images. Your piece put me in a very tranquil borderline dream like state. But ...

Well, well, I'm new to this whole forum thing, but people's opinions of other's work are very varied. I've taken a bit of what Claudette said, "It's still just as ...

. . .Intense That was the word that popped into my head after reading your piece, never read anything like it. I love the opening line. And "chug-chugged along home ...

POP as in popular?

She walked and he walked. She was a chatterbox, he never talked. They stopped in front of the double doors, they were outside the little store. They kicked the doors ...

In reply to Mad's thoughts: "Tell me you don't think so?" I thought of this line for a bit after your suggestions, and a comma would make it correct in ...

Yes, so you see I've never been a part of a forum before, I've already managed to post two comments, and posted a topic of my very own called 'That ...

Are you still leaning against concrete walls, smoking your cigarettes? Watching the drunken lads stumble and fall? Come out of the rain, I confess, Come to me, stay a while. ...

Despite what others have said, I liked it. I liked the fact that it has a quick, abrupt sense to it. I liked that it started all nice, then took ...

It started off well. Whilst reading the first stanza I expected it to be a rhyming poem, but it petered out after that first verse. There seemed to be a ...