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Re: Heal. (Chapter Four)
So long without A review! Horrible! Ok, A few things. This Passage didn't seem to have anything doing. It is basically a chapter for the heroin to reminisce. This type ...
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Re: Elyse Ch-4
Jeez! so long without a single review! Well, Here is Me, remedying this situation. Over all, I thought it painted an accurate picture of a young girl being shuffled between ...
Sep 2, 2010 - Re: My many Faces... of Doom! Aug 25, 2010
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Re: That last look,1.1
Ok, dear, you need to take another look at this for punctuation. I'm not usually a stickler about that, but this one was particularly bad in that department. Now, to ...
Aug 25, 2010 -
Re: Sea Ballet
Hello again. I like your metaphor skill. The way you use the ballet for the sea is a bit over-done, but luckily, you bring it some fresh life. Kudos. On ...
Aug 25, 2010 -
Re: Tomb- Sad poem
What is with the drug poems today? These powerful poems can be so... emotionally draining. (That's a good thing in a poem) In poems with a painful feel, I usually ...
Aug 25, 2010 -
Re: Shooting Heroin (14+ Perhaps)
Wow. That was... Heroin- ee? It made me uncomfortable, and that is the beauty of it. It started with ecstasy, then spiraled down into dirtiness, Just like how I imagine ...
Aug 25, 2010 -
Re: Dark Angel
Thanks so much for your review. I am slowly editing this post on paper, so it will soon be much improved. I will then re-post, so I may need another ...
Aug 25, 2010 -
Re: Dop.
Genius. It was simple, concise, ARRG! The Dop!!! It made me angry with you! I swear, you fall only to spite me Wonderful!
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Dark Angel
I wrote this at like, ten o'clock last night, and I woke up this morning, re-read it, and was like WTF? This story sucks! AAAARRG!!! So now I shall have ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Young Lady of the Moon
I love the blues. So this sits good with me, but I think you need to incorporate a chorus into your song. Something that makes sense after all the stanzas. ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Young Lady of the Moon
I love the blues. So this sits good with me, but I think you need to incorporate a chorus into your song. Something that makes sense after all the stanzas. ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Demised Lovers
Emo. Totally emo. Aside from the emo-ness I liked it. I thought It was interesting, but in the middle, where you say "with a gun to my head" it was ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Dark Angel
Read this first. It will explain everything. I rose from the water. Newborn. Again. The Darkest Pool of Drowned Souls had chosen me as its release. The release of a ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: The Owl
Kewl story. I think it needs a bit of work though. If you Explain more about the owl being what else it is, then the story will feel more completed ...
Jun 21, 2010
