FLyerS

Hey dear, Is this your first novel attempt? If it is, here's some things you should know. (These aren't hard-and-fast rules. When it comes to writing, nothing is.) When describing ...

Who breaks but remains unbroken? Who bore first life but does not live? Who is poisoned by her greatest children? Who gave all and continues to give? What is sad ...

Good. I liked your mannequin metaphor. It made a lot of sense. There was some nice flow to your words. The part where you said: And throw it at the ...

Blood-in-a-bathtub

Hey, you didn't do a question! But the answer to the question above you is. Totally a guy from school. All the guys in my novels are either taken or ...

Granted, but now you sing the song that's on everybody's nerves, everybody's nerves, everybody's nerves. I wish I were dead. (Corrupt that sucka!)

I thought you spend way to much time in this forum.

3/100000000 Fail.

Banned for being a hippie

We started booking it across the parking lot. “WHAT WAS THAT??!?! WHY!?! JUST WHY?!? WERE YOU TRYING TO GET THIS OUTCOME?!?!” I shouted. “Save your breath. We’ve got to RUN!” ...

Injury: We will swear. A lot. Something Awesome happens: Cool! Wow. "Intense! Sleeping bags are "in tents."" "That's bananna's!" Epic! (that's a big one!) Someone says something good about themself ...

She ordered, then we sat in the doughnut shop. She took off her trench. Underneath she had on a flowy, low-cut emerald top, with a black and white patterned collar. ...

Review you Newb! Once again, FLOW!!!! Focus on it! More once you review. If you do good I may adopt you.

I don't do nitpicks. Ask someone else. I like the way the poem wasn't about a love gone sour. I like how simple it was. Now. You need to work ...

When I was younger I saw my daddy cry, and curse at the wind. Here I am, once again, I’m torn into pieces. Can’t deny it, can’t pretend, I thought ...