FLyerS

First of all, I would like to point out some discrepancies It will be my choice. followed almost immediately by What will fate choose? also: I fall into a fetal ...

Yeah, It is bland. That's why I don't usually write love poems. They turn out dumb. This one is a writing assignment.

Good. I liked the dual nature of the character. The line She wears bright colourful clothes to school doesn't quite jive rhythmically. Neither does And insists she prefers to blend. ...

I like this poem. This woman isn't proud of her husband's sacrifice like the government tells her to be. She is angry, and has a right to be. She accuses ...

Blond curls caress my hand in my mind's eye. His deep brown eyes lock mine across the room. I blush and he does to, we're both so shy. A smile, ...

Hey, FLyerS here. This is an oddly formatted piece. I'm not sure I liked it. The sentences were awkward. If you make the sentences formatted in different lines It makes ...

I guess I didn't make it clear enough that it is a song... that's why the repeated stanza... The rhythm sounds better with the music playing in my head... Thanks ...

Such a shy little girl am I. I didn't know love could be so conspicuous. Maybe I just shouldn't have tried to find love in such an obvious place Oh, ...

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Hey, FLyerS here with your requested review. It's good to start with action to pull your reader in, but this action needs to forshadow what action is to come. If ...

Wow, you've got a lot of reviews, sure you need another one? I loved this story. It was great, but saying "I was there" at the beginning of every week ...

All finished!

Sorry it took so long to review you! I haven't been online in a while. This story is very James Bond-esque. I thought It could use a little more descriptions. ...

That was weird... I don't know... somehow the syntax of the language was off... it sounded as if a British person was trying to sound American. All tough and stuff. ...