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Re: Goodnight
I wish you could find something better to talk about than love. Love found. Love lost. Love taken. Love given. Love forbidden. Love ignored. I am tired of "love" as ...
Sep 26, 2009 -
Re: The Path of Hurdles
Good topic. You need to work on the rhythm and meter.
Sep 26, 2009 -
Re: I've Been There Before
Good poem. I like it when people don't use love as a crutch. Good job on the topic. In my opinion, you should change little words here: "One thing’s for ...
Sep 26, 2009 -
Re: Me and You
very ok. You started out with a tired old theme, then you changed it to something slightly less tired. Overall, I liked your wording, but you need to pick a ...
Sep 26, 2009 -
Re: lol
lol is a word I like. I use it to say that you are so Funny
Sep 26, 2009 -
Re: the pacifier
Awwwwww! So CUTE!
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Butterfly Memories
I love your imagery here. SO COOL. Especially the French at the end. I love French.
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Alone
I likes it i likes it. Very good. Love the last line :smt089 so true.
Jul 20, 2009 -
Re: Women's pants
I think you are over reacting. I am a female, so I can safely say, that if you buy pants that have no pockets and you want pockets, you are ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Who Is The Most Famous/Coolest/Nicest YWS Member.
Ok, I don't want this to be a popularity vote. If someone has been especially nice to you, this can be, like, a public shout-out. If someone inspires hero-worship, worship ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Gray's Garden, part 1
Very good!
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: No-title
NASTY NITPICKS are always first. So, here goes. I love to love the things I hate But to hate the things I love, Would be a lie to my heart ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Letter to You
First of, THE NASTY NITPICKINGS :twisted: those with weak constitutions should leave the arena. Every time I try and pictures your faces? Picture not pictures. Stil don’t; Two 'l's count ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: my world
Very good. I liked the second stanza. Your bright blue eyes, now a crimson red. Your innocent face, now a murderous stare. Your wondrous joys, now deceitful lies. Oh! So ...
Jul 18, 2009 -
Re: Catching Wind
Very well written. I cannot find any flaws with this piece. The lines didn't trip over themselves, the rhythm was appealing, and you just made sense! My favorite part: catching ...
Jul 18, 2009
