Extraterrestial

I thought this was a brilliant piece, i think the cat idea was cool and totally original. Same as the others, they beat me to the grammar mistake.grrrrrr. I hope ...

i agree with shrek, but what the hell is with the a new line after every sentance. But dont let that bother you to much, as it was still a ...

much better.

The Royal Palace Arthur and the boy studied there surroundings, hidden by the darkness as they kneeled behind a bush. The palace. It was heavily guarded with guards that patrolled ...

Found no grammar mistakes once again-grrrrrr. Although i think the parents death could have been a little sadder, and to me it all seemed rushed, but that's my opinion. Just ...

Hey i would just like to say, thanks for the great comments and tips on how to improve on my mistakes.

Original-Interresting-Entertaining. This was a great opening. Like the idea of a world run by penquins. I also couldn't find any grammer mistakes. So far its good so keep writting. Will ...

It's well written but it seemed alot like Darren Shan's book's e.g the demonta series. But if you could steer it away from that then it could turn out to ...

Clueless For The Greater Good The chilly night breeze whipped through Arthur’s poorly made clothes. His bare feet froze on the icy cobbled street. But what made it worse were ...

i agree with the others, about short choppy sentances. But it think they go really well with the piece and so far im interrested on what's going to happen. Please ...

I could feel my legs failing, as I sprinted through the crowded wood. Darkness was still near, I could feel it. If I didn’t get to my Nan’s house soon, ...

WICHFORD MANOR The Night air breeze stroked my cheek, as wandered blindly through the dense wood. The ghostly moon, hung in the pitch black darkness.-Its dim gaze being my only ...

sorry for the false info, but its far to short and its far from ready yet. will let know when its done __________________________________________ In a place like this, death is ...

The Experiments Chapter 1 Red Lights The sun shone down upon the silent street. Bishallt Avenue. Fluffy white clouds hung in the clear blue sky. The tall lush green trees, ...

well What i did, is that i tried to steer away from green slimy aliens and try and create something entirely new. Being that its going to be your own ...