Explosive_Pen

Hmm. I like it. It's sort of like a little revolution of happiness, but then it was subdued, but you never know when it'll happen again. It made me smile ...

It is the rhythm of our thoughts, The melody of consciousness. It is the electricity of nerves, It is our soul. Do you know it? It is both noise and ...

Once again, your work has caught my eye. I must say, you're a very good writer. However, I'm confused about the "blue-and-pink line". Try as I might, I just can't ...

You can't make time stand still, You can't fill my head with an endless stream of ideas. My pen shall inevitably run out of ink, As, inevitably, I shall run ...

I liked it. Did you know cul de sac is Latin for "Bottom of the bag"? I like how you mix in the italicized lines. It really draws your eye ...

Hah, nice. Thanks for making me smile.

Haha, what can I say? Springrain2693 basically pointed out most of the faults, and a few unnecessary ones at that. I found your poem to be a bit redundant and ...

I liked the message. How many times have I felt that way? Your stanzas were a bit choppy, and the rhythm was a little off. You should also work on ...

Such a pretty girl, Such a shame. Wasted in her own self-doubt, Wasted in her own hatred. Such a beautiful boy, So much pain on his face, As the knife ...

Wow, that's really beautiful. I'm guessing it's not really about the moon? Like the moon is symbolic of some lost love? Or is that just my own sappiness? Probably. Anyway, ...

Hah, thanks. You style seems a little dark. I would have normally turned to that direction, but I wanted to experiment with something. I wanted to give the reader hope; ...

Wow. I really liked it. The overall message is really powerful (for lack of a better word). I like your analogy of humans to gods; that we applaud them for ...

On frozen mountaintops high above, Where darkness lingers but moonlight glows, Lies the quiet of liberated souls. Past the mountains’ permafrost, In the valleys deep below, Tarry the spirits of ...

Wow. It's very deep and sad, but I really liked it. I love how the rhyme seems to come so naturally, and how it doesn't seem forced, like it sometimes ...

Hah, thanks. Yes, the prologue is supposed to be histerical. You'll find out why in one of the later chapters. But thank you for pointing out the repetition and my ...