Explosive_Pen

Hiya. I'm a nitpick this, 'kay? There is a Magic to nature that will never be explained by science. ^Like Twin (aka Fluteluvr77) said before me, magic should not be ...

Aww, Twin. So sad. Yes, I know he is a horrible person. But don't feel bad. We all make mistakes (like me!). Rhythm issues. Like, lots of them. And the ...

Wow, Twin, awesome! Didn't see any grammar mistakes so that's good. It seems really short though. A lot shorter than when we hand-wrote it. But that's probably because I write ...

Post

Oh, June, this is beautiful. I mean, it's extremely sad and it makes want to go crawl under a rock, but it's beautifully written. Absolutely amazing, and I am so ...

What Twin (aka fluteluvr77) said. The (author's last name, page number) is in-text citation. You do that with websites too. It's : (website's URL, paragraph number).

Life

Emily!!! Gahk, you know Twin doesn't punctuate (which is why she should've let me type it; tsk). And yeah, I told her not to put thoughts in quotes. And by ...

Thirsty

Actually Em, I didn't even notice. Want me to pick a different letter, or do you not care?

In the tenth line, put "it's" before too. (El) I love the seventeenth line with the "grinning", nice personification there (May) Yes, we gave you a joint review. Feel special. ...

Cheese

Haha, Twin. You should add Poland to your adored things. I mean, really. How can you have a Polish TWIN and not love Poland? It's the most amazing country there ...

They have a lot of unisex names that can go either way, and since they have all kinds of ethnic names, you can add a little originality to your story. ...

This is wonderful. Like, amazing. I absolutely love your writing. It really resonates with me emotionally. Anyway, there's nothing here that I can critique except for in the last line. ...