Evangelina

Hmm. I am undecided. S1 seems to start out pretty well--but "devoid of?" is missing something. Devoid of what? If you mean to connect it to the previous idea, it ...

Haha, will do, locky :D

Alright thanks guys! Will edit, etc. etc.

Haha. Trident. I don't know really what to say, except that I LOVED IT! I dunno. There's something about the simple, no-nonsense business of ordering a 'which from a deli ...

Gin, I love the last line, and I can see you're trying to make it classically beautiful. The thing with nature--trust me I know, I've tried countless times and failed ...

Dear Penny, I can see you working through all of these brilliant images and lovely phrasing--it's just the structure that needs to tip it off, and quite frankly, I find ...

You Whispered Winter You whispered winter, shivering under the moon but above the clouds entangled with the shape-shifters of the night. You; you whispered rays of binding light touching skin ...

I love the first line. The atmosphere of...longing? that you bring by begging, " Take me ..." A very good setting starter. my tired lips well-beaten paths for your indulgence ...

No, I just prefer real literature. Writing should convey something beautiful, something deep, or something new about both the writer as a person or the way one writes. Meg cabot ...

Ew. EW EW EW. --that is how much I dislike Cabot and "girlish" books.

No worries. Thank you muchly.

Ok guys, I edited it! WOO!

Ok guys, I edited it! Please tell me what you think!

Yeah, I finished it after bleeding through the books and internet for a few long hours XD

1. October 16th 1936 Yablochnoye, Ukraine Yvette Chikatilo was screaming, blood pouring down her legs, her voice carrying throughout the small hut and into the village; where interested and revolted ...