Evangelina

Whoa... I am completely in love with this. Like totally. I love the idea of Frankenstein taking the place of the crazed docteur. Great job, really. Look forward to more ...

Stanza three is my favorite by far. Your rhyme scheme seems fine! The ending was odd, but althogether a worthy read, if not a little bland. Well done! -Evang.

I know I've said this before, but please refrain from what we call the "grocery list" form. Don't list things, poetically express them. Best of luck, -Evang.

Reads a bit like a self-help book. Boring and unoriginal.

"The stars were alight," And such a beautiful night The glimmer the glamor Oh, the stars of the night!" But the stars of the night Were none to compare Oh, ...

Cade basically said everything I wanted to say. Let's just remember: the best poems can be ont he simplest and most childish things. Just don't make them "cutsey". Overall good ...

Wow, this IS a long poem. But you know onto the poetry! The first stanza's rhymes sound forced--somewhere between "time" and "rhyme" something needs to change. Also the stamping/squashing of ...

I'd consider revising the last two lines of the second stanza--the rhyme seems rather forced and choppy. Also I don't feel like the last to lines of the poem connect ...

Yes, it is rather vague, rather cliched, and not wholly original... I do like the beginning and I think you have a good thing going--it just takes more than twenty ...

A few punctuation errors that you should be able to find in a short runthrough. I'm also not quite sure how midnight rain is related to this kind of depressing ...

So I figured out what I'm writing!!!!!!!!! Two more days! ^^

Haha. This is a cute poem. Cute being the operative word here. I would try on making the rhymes seem less forced, and smooth out the lines so it flows ...

You know what? I change my mind. Don't change the last line; change the third line of stanza one. Darkness--do you see how you used Dark already? I was wrong. ...

..OH! I just noticed the "again" pattern. Sorry!

I might revise the last line to fit with the rest of the poem. Other than that, yes it works!