Evangelina

L4 of S1 explains the basic flaw of the entire poem. How ironic :D -Evang.

I am reading: Anna Karenina by Tolstoy Catch-22 by Heller possibly starting the OJ book tomorrow, depending if I give in or not possibly reading Heartsick

[inspired by true events] The voices were back, hauntingly familiar. They always returned—sometimes after a long drink of something warm and cozy, sometimes after the feel of soft fur between ...

Cad, headscarfs and such have nothing to do with the actual religion.

Yes, and the usage of a title already famous--"Behind Hazel Eyes" is rather uncreative. This seems the usual faux pas; the weepy, woe-begotten teller. But how can the reader be ...

Proof-read. There are quite some silly mistakes here :D It's rather bland/childish/singular. It seems pretty interesting, but is rather drag. I'd dump the rhyming. The ending is good; what a ...

L2 has serious issues. The over-usage of pronouns is astounding. Try using the omniscent form--I think its called?--where you don't need to refer continually to 'you' since we all know ...

Just to make a quick observation--there is nothing in the actual Islam religion that says anything about wearing burkhas or covering up at all. It is just something men have ...

Thanks to both of you! Actually, maybe your from the UK because in the US it's spelled without the U. -Evang.

People will do anything to prove a point.

I dunno. I think I was trying to say that there is a song in this bit of nature that is unique and cannot be put into words. Due to ...

There is a whisper on the wind, and a thousand dancing fairies touch the sky. For every breathe there is color, and for every color there is life. In the ...

Physics is Pat, of course.

S1--Awesome. S2--somewhere in the middle, I got...lost. I dunno. Like I was reading a grocery list or something. The words are brilliant, the imagery fantastic...perhaps the structure needs adjusting?

"Abraham, oh Abraham!" he sings, and I didn't know he knew of my Abraham, but now I know we both grew up in his shadow. --------- My god, this is ...