Evander

I liked the ending to poem no. 4! It ended on a really touching note.

Day #5 Poem #8 Title: this wasn't supposed to be a eulogy you lived and died on these docks, but i was never one for eulogies. i wanted to kiss ...

Day #5 Poem #7 Title: Candied Lands i floated on cotton candy clouds back in '09, back when my mind was quiet and cavities were a dream; because the pastel ...

Day #4 Poem #6 Tile: it's just a roll of the dice my mother brought me candied dice on the 75th day of june when the sweltering ohio heat beat ...

I think processing plant could possibly fit the qualifications? I mentioned "water beds" and water is an element!

I really like the rhythm that you had in the first two stanzas of poem no. 2! I can't wait to see what else you'll write during the rest of ...

Dang, I really liked that first stanza in number two; it was a good introduction to the rest of the poem. Keep up the good work!

That was a cute poem! I really liked the last line!

Day #3 Poem #5 Title: precious metals melt in july i cut my silver teeth on expectations of greatness, falling back from golden stars with the small of my back ...

Day #3 Poem #4 Title: processing plant i wonder if you could pick out the raw cotton in my brain with silver tweezers on a Sunday night, and together we ...

Awh, thank you, @Kays! That really means a bunch to me.

Well, what works best for the story that you're telling? Is it beneficial to keep your reader in suspense and does it contribute to the overall narrative, or is it ...

Day #2 Poem #3 Title: haiku, maybe? probably not simulated life surrounded by vast gray skies existence loading

Day #2 Poem #2 Title: this foundation is sturdy a dilapidated farm house in the middle of ohio with a gray summer storm looming overheard surrounded by the vast expanse ...

Day #1 Poem #1 Title: Rope 759 recovery isn't linear, so cut out the knot inside my chest and hand me another rope. sit with me as i open my ...