EscapeThat

I'm guessing there is some kind of esoteric meaning behind this so I'll keep my opinions to myself... this time.

A few things with this; A. It's very short for a chapter. B. The is zero build up to the climax. C. The concept sounds dangerously similar to The Hunger ...

I think the title of this piece perfectly demonstrates everything that wrong with it. You are too young for love and as such you don't really understand what it is ...

It's good that your being hard on yourself as its going to make you better but I think you might be being a little too hard here. I need to ...

Hi Mikeypro, Thank you so much for the review. As I stated earlier here, sometimes I need a more professional eye to look over my work and spot those gramaitcal ...

It astounds me after all the people that I have shown this to and all the times that I have read this myself that those little buggers still get through ...

Now thats what I call a story, one of the best things I've ever read on here, if not the best. The ending was superb, left me feeling cold and ...

I couldn't agree more, you pour a little of yourself into every person you create, even if they go against the grain of who you are. Haha fear not you ...

I find it quite upsetting that people flock to something like this putting it on the featured section while many other original pieces that people poured their heart and soul ...

It reminds me a little of the short story I have in my portfolio minus the happy ending and the poetry format. I like this, very evocative, the picture is ...

As another person who lived through this in one of the worst hit areas I don't feel this captures enough of the horror. There were screaming people, riot police on ...

I like that it looks very androgenous and has a floating waif-like beauty. I guess some people don't like the arms buts thats what gives it the magic for me. ...

I like it, I think the structure is unique, a little medley of inner jottings.The great thing is each is short and sweet and if you can't find something relatable ...

Perhaps if you offerered some real advice or perspective people woud be able to grow as writers and benefit from other peoples standpoints. I don't know the specifics of the ...

I feel that this a little candid, as though you are just talking about what you want rather than crafting a story around the focal point (the mirror of Erised). ...