Ermixon

Apep stood against the window of his study in his headquarters in the town hall in Great Yarmouth. He was going to be a dad. His wife had just told ...

as it always was in situations they definitely should not be in ["definitely" is an unnecessary word, if you remove it the sentence will flow better.] It had a sharp ...

Alright I'm willing to review pretty much anything and unlike most of the reviewers here I encourage Fantasy and Scifi. Unfortunately i do have some reservations about critiquing romance and ...

Name: Time and again Genre: Science fiction Link:

Will you critique this scifi story?

I am doing an in text critique, i have emboldened the problem areas and italicized what i think is wrong with them in parenthesses Death Sophie should have known something ...

Can you review my short story?

Organ Eater You find yourself standing on a dark street corner. You see her, a lone woman walking through the empty midnight streets. A working girl, coming home after a ...

I find it funny that I submitted a time travel story directly following yours. But your story is really very well written. I only noticed a couple of grammatical errors ...

TIME AND AGAIN By E.R. Mixon The Professor ran around the dark basement laboratory in a frenzy of zeal, taking readings from meters and gauges and jotting them down in ...

The figure wore a ankle length jacket (with the collar turned upwards to hide his face), black shoes, and a hat pulled over the top half of his head. parentheses ...

Could you please review my science fiction story. give me the harshest critique that you can muster.

Could you please review my science fiction story.

Would you please review this, it's a science fiction story about a geeky protagonist who inherits a gauntlet that let's him travel to other planets. I would like a full ...

Would you please review my science fiction story