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Re: The Pillars of the Earth
1. Throes of passion threw me not, A sin I did not suit. For I knew that love and lust Bore only bitter fruit. In all of my piety I ...
Feb 23, 2011 -
Re: The Sweetest Addiction
Oh and I'm sorry, I'm a terrible typist and speller, So I apologize for any typos
Feb 23, 2011 -
Re: The Sweetest Addiction
Ok It wasn't bad but I have some issues with the structure. I'll explain [quoteThe addiction is sweet I’ve heard it if not a thousand times,- Ok. Here is where ...
Feb 23, 2011 -
Re: Cruel Irony (a metaphorical poem about people I know)
I was not a big fan of this poem. I thought it was sloppy. Decent ideas but a little vague. You need more structure. I know that were poets and ...
Feb 23, 2011 -
Re: The Last Art
When little, coddled men of means Put their pens to work, Their product dies a hackyned death, For egotism lurks. The crucible of canticles; Of meter, plot and prose Burn ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: Christmas meaning.
I liked the message and it was well though out and the imagery was also very good. I do feeel like though, with a non-ryhming poem It really is nessiscary ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: I'll Love You In the Next
It wasn't bad, it had some potential but I do have some isssues witht the overall construction. Though my flame of life flickers-If it was me, I'd wouldn't put this ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: Suicide
ok maybe im gonna be a downer but i just do not see wwhat the rest of you see. poetry is not supposed to be blunt in my opinion. i ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Virtues of the Damned
Least Among my vile things, And the pain my demons bring, The softest sour note I sing, Is my conviction in myself. My Pride in my own moral health, Assurance ...
Nov 7, 2010 -
Re: The Play of Life
decent. not bad. I'm not a fan of this style of poetry, but taking that biased out of it it wasot bad. My biggest ssue is how vauge it is, ...
Nov 7, 2010 -
Re: Rainy, Lonely Night
I actually agree with the review above, I felt that you rushes to the ending just a lttle bit, it threw off the pace of your story. I liked the ...
Nov 7, 2010 -
Re: Buried
i would recommend not posting things like this, obviously unfinished, sloopy work with no vowels. if you wanted to post it i would have recommended editing first
Nov 2, 2010 -
Re: Booms and Pings
BOOM. Ping. First time I’d shot a gun. I’d only put my eye up to it, and gently pulled the trigger, aim ever so slightly to the left. I promised ...
Nov 2, 2010 -
Re: The Rape of Erin Aghdra
Among the symbols of my youth: The wood, the steel, the stone, I lay to hear the reasonance Of my empty second home. When at rest and meditation, This place ...
Nov 2, 2010
