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I put brick because the first time I went to Deadwood they had some brick streets, the rest are tar and it takes away from the poem. It is shot ...

Good job,that's a relly sad story and makes you want to hear the whole thing. Just a few nit picks. Add periods at the ends of sentances, I did see ...

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Wow, that was an amazingly emotional poem. Especially for someone who is just 14. When everyone else turned their backs Her single finger wiped off my tear. Even over the ...

I like this one because it shows how much you care about the people you are writting about. These are a few of my favorite lines. In a crowded room, ...

I love the graphic, but i'm glad you posted the poem by itself because it is easier to correct. First: add periods at the end of sentances and change the ...

Personaly I like the "in my dark room" line. It helps set up the mood. Stanzas could be used hear, but it is not necessarly needed. How you hear a ...

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Sorry I don't have anything to critique on this. I really liked it though. Personally I would cut eaither a"all day" or "all week" from the first line. It just ...

Cute, a little repetitive in my opinion though. The I in "i try to imagine my friends again" needs to be capitalized. It would help to break up this poem ...

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I agree, you should add something to "I just want you to know" It would add to the feeling of the poem. Other than that it was a cute poem. ...

ohh, this is so sweet. I like the pacing of this poem. Just two quick things: One:Keep the 'Cause. It may not be in the dictionary but it is used ...

I like you're unique writting style. Only thin i would change is there are no periods at the ends of most of you're sentances, and that you should have lower ...