Eraqio

Dogwood baked in the omnipotent light that seemed to have no real point of origin. Every dead weed, exposed stone and abandoned car part caught and absorbed the harsh sunlight, ...

Lovely for now. Only the wind keeps me up. Can I shut the door and keep out the cold. Wind blowing through your hair. Less glamor than you can bear. ...

Much of the piece read rather clumsily. You payed attention to how everything would probably have paced out and come to a head but you overlooked just a few fine ...

THe playfulness of this is really want pulled me in. I felt like I was being an entertaining story meant to hold my attention till the very end, which is ...

ahmmm. Well I liked it. In the very least. but really this needed more... well... length. Not an over explanation of the core concept or even a massive blathering to ...

It was too.... cluttered. at first. However as I went through it all the closeness of the lines contributed to the emotion coming through it all, the kind of subtle ...

Grimoire book of the lesser key this was alot harder to write than my first submission, feel free to tear apart I sat up, images of what I just witnessed ...

Sounds like the set up for a Romero film. Anyways. It was very good, not even being curt, I loved how you composed each description and even added in some ...

I'll avoid awkward moments and try to make you smile. Your eyes light up with laughter but all I hear is quiet. I've spent a few days, watching the sky ...

Its too cold The butterflies died and lay in the snow. We're too old. To shelter dreams of the lost tomorrow. Bleeding innosence. From the first kiss that meant something ...

I burned the world, with a box of matches. And I laughed all the while. Kerosene and the smell of still lit embers, graced my senses as it all came ...

Epic...thats really all I can say. I loved your, well style is the obvious choice, but really I loved the feel of the entire peice, a kind of distant spectating ...

Towards the end I think I spied a typo. Onwards. This piece agitated my length trigger mainly because I prefer works of this calibre to give me more, feed my ...

Congratulations, you have earned my interest! The story's intimate stream of consciousness and the very human elements of adolescent uncertainty and nervousness were very well captured and every scene

Tad harsh for a first post. As I see it there was thought put into the personal aspect of this and it is very, very well done, the awkwardness of ...