Eraqio

A poem that slips from calm sunset at the shore to watery doom for an unsuspecting man. Nice. other than the lacking in punctuation, the only problems are you could ...

From the very start I was lost. THe title drew me in because it was familiar, and thats not really something you want, but from what I can infer, this ...

Hmm. I like the theme, which you've probably gotten already, but the composition of it threw me for a loop. I get the insertion of the minute, commonplace things like ...

Faint glimmers of sunlight to the East, the narrow crevice between the shadowy mountains and the quickly darkening clouds fill with a blinding light. Birds stir and call out to ...

I suck at critisizm so here goes. It all read very disorganized, which for me was a side effect of the painting, everything came out jumbled and forceful yet chaotic ...

It read like a brief passage from one of the epics of the bible. that or one of the popular gorifying tales of the old knights. There was a sence ...

What I saw in eyes so empty, when soon I would be made full, Was a blessing, that I'd be destined to forsake. With every change in pace, I'd find ...

Something cool happen... wow. Sorry this isnt a Sephanie Meyer novel.

You focus too much on this concept of ultimate beauty. Classic romantics and victorian writers might emphasize this easily, but you beat it into the reader again and again without ...

A century come and gone and I am but a witness. In it I leave children to shape tomorrow. Today I am but a man; A man with a lifetime ...

I'm drawing a blank right now as far as criticism goes so I'll just say what comes to mind. the end felt like an oh never mind kind of thing, ...

A few of the lines lost me, as far as imagery go, like to me they diddnt make sense. then again thats just me. the whole progression of the poem ...

Calling all cowards, I'm the king of you all. Desperation and a taste for just 'it' all too much to handle. Watch your mouth or it might run off, even ...

Wow, I've only been here for a while and so far I've met so many great people and gotten alot of boosts to my ego. YWS is an amazing site ...

Hold dear the moments that make us. Stand clear of the forces in life that overshadow. I think I'm late, life always waits for someone. Maturity. I never want to ...