Eraqio

This is a long work, if you dont like lengthy reads in your poetry, dont read this then complain about length, I just warned you. Awake, awake, no I'm not. ...

A long read is the first thing I have to say. Second, I liked the naturalness of it all, some of it did come off as kind of clunky, like ...

Very... uninteresting. I mean, just from the opening it dumps us into this situation without any fore-ground info or action. I get that this is 'part 2' but really there ...

Very... uninteresting. I mean, just from the opening it dumps us into this situation without any fore-ground info or action. I get that this is 'part 2' but really there ...

I dont remember Television being that deep. Anyways. The character is a little bastard. haha, sorry had to get that out of the way. He spouts quick one liners then ...

Red Jacket stalker Her piercing, deep green eyes scorned my aura. The questionable silence. Red passionate glance of etiquette. The fire and sexual intention in the contrast of her hair ...

"Breathe, Bonnie," Oh yeah, air. I let myself suck in, (hah, sorry I think some better phrasing or changing it's use) ecstasy at last. Somehow forgotten and unlikely foreign, the ...

Like a Dark version of Encyclopedia Jones. Well, I was bugged by the improper dialogue at the beginning, when the principal is announcing the death over the intercom, it felt ...

Were those stars? Brief flashes in the sky beyond the thin and sickly clouds appeared so vividly even if for a second. No, its fire. Comets of death streak down ...

I'd really appreciate an actual critique ...

hahahahah, I effing love this! I mean, yeah it was a bit cluttered at parts but hey, you get a ruby and it will always have something stuck to it. ...

I thought the last part was still a part of it and went "WTF?" haha, but seriously... Your take on the whole roses are red thing was interesting and I ...

The worst is yet to come. Your casket's almost done. Life wont ever keep you young, baby teeth from bitter sons. We're planted too soon, last year's winter yet to ...

Mother she wont smile for me, most days she wont even sleep. Some nights I swear that I can feel her drying bones, eyes always open and heart so cold. ...

In my mind I saw someone talking to themselves hah. Hmm, well for one it is very, very simple, and that I liked, the flow was very straightforward with the ...