Eraqio

The disjointed feel really gets me because thats the form I love to use, but this piece just diddnt catch me, especially the messed up spoiler. Besides that however, the ...

hahahah, wow. Just, just great. Beyond me laughing at just being caught off guard by half of it, it is very well put together, its one of those poems that ...

Epic...Just epic hahah. I love random nonsence, the world of literature wouldnt be the awesome thing it is without some chaos every once and a while. This peice lost me ...

Who are you who are you? Please tell me cuz I'm dying to know! The one with the sweet smile always turns out to be the slyest kid in town, ...

Definately go on with it! I love the concept, especially when on the heels of our current President who everyone said was foreign, different and lets not forget Black, because ...

Head spinning hah. I liked the one after the other feel and the deep contemplation the characters gave off as each came up to the edge and so on, very ...

GAH!!! Sorry but I'm a stickler for length, and with a work this good I wish there had been more, alot more. Besides that though, very well done, what is ...

The story was, intresting, to say the least, and with me to catch my intrest already makes you a pretty good writer. Besides that, many passages seemed to be almost ...

The sky glowed a fiery red, with traces of violet and purple snaking their way through the colors as the sun set. The breeze was strong, yet still calm enough ...

Very proper language, I liked that. Usually fanfic works concerning this paticular game come off as bragging spouts or accounts of some battle on live. Very well done language wise, ...

It was good. Thats what I can say of it without going too into detail. But since this is a critique, I think I should. It was very Generic, in ...

The Title felt just a bit generic and the poem itself came off as the same. However I re-read it and changed my first impression, the work itself is actually ...

It started out so innocently, No one knew the real me, I hid the truth from myself, and tried my best to do the same thing, to everyone, for everyone, ...

Very beautiful in a morbid kind of way. Got alot of strong visuals with a dark tinge, lot of imagination in the feel you might have been trying to give ...

Sad way for it to end. :/ I liked the piece, very in depth though processing and I liked the continual reference to your own memories of a time of ...