Eraqio

It read like the kind of slap-dash approach you get from manga about schools. Also the line at the end where he explains why all the streets have the strawberry ...

whoo, mysterious. Little brown? I dont know if that is a typo or a phrasing I'm not familiar with, but whatever. Anyways. The opening threw me, then I understood it, ...

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! You suuuuuck, give me more!!! It was simple with plenty of heart, my Gosh just that initial floating feeling I got from the first paragraph made me jump on ...

Too personal. Thats really what I initially get from this. The whole thing was a more for your eyes only thing. but hey, you shared so who gives a flip. ...

hahaha, I liked the 'G' line. anyways, down to brass tacks or whatever the hell the phrase is. I liked it. It diddnt change my life and I diddnt want ...

When I cant sleep, there's a voice in my ear. There's a buzz and a laugh, there's always more quiet. Silence to me breeds paranoia. A festering wound in my ...

A musing seafarer. This was all flowed like that, like the narrator was musing after different thoughst in his head, and they all came off very pretty. The presentation of ...

I've been spending my time reviewing lately, and I'm kinda low on reviews for my newer works in general. I'm not asking for any specific reviews. Just head to my ...

it kept feeling to me kind of.... choked. Brief statements like this are excellent, and make a reader want more, which is great. But the wording of this just... was ...

This could have been separated into parts. Thats one thing. Second, you add details that are really needless at different parts that dont need expansion, you overload us with all ...

Cute. This read like a Disney scene. Dont take it as a bad thing, I grew up back when Disney was good and diddnt have to rely on the maveriks ...

Too little dialogue and awkward scene change. Yes this is almost nothing BUT dialogue but every line of speech was short. It was choked before real meaning could be brought ...

I apply everything in my last review to this, EXCEPT the parts about line separations. If put to music, this would all be interesting, sort of a bebop, loose rythem. ...

Form is subject to the maker. Anyways. This was Good. No this was Great. It was subtle at times, all out straightforward at others, and all the way through thoughtful. ...

The last stanza really threw me. I'd prefer some back info really, not stuffy intellectual things but at least a location or slight season or both. Now, the form of ...