ErBear

This is short, sweet, and simple. (: I liked the way you split up your sentances. It just worked for the piece. Ugh, hills. I KNOW! I just ran for ...

I completely agree with the review above me. Your style of writing is very good, and your voice shines through to make it an overall enjoyable piece. (: Watch your ...

Because your internet company enjoys taunting you, so they set it on 'extra-frusterating'. Why do I stay up so late?

Because it's trying to tell you that something's wrong. Because your brother bit it. Because the MRI broke it. What does Pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis mean? (haha)

It's not the things that you're saying that are stupid, it's the way that people react to them. What's an MRI? (noobish question, though still wondering. Look above for context. ...

Love when I feel lonely. There's nothing like the feeling of love, but fun rules my life. So love < fun. Why is outside appearance SO important to the world?

My heart races as music starts to sound The violin plays a short jagged rise Our crowd murmurs as we appear around In this bug world we are cut down ...

This is beautiful. Literally beautiful. Overall an enjoyable read. Comments- I understand that this story is meant to be crazy and random; a totally non-typical day. And while it highlighted ...

Mandy's mom was driving her car along that What highway? You might want to say 'the highway' so people aren't confused dark highway. Mandy used to be that young was ...

Take a deep breath and I to calm my racing heart. What time is it? It's 6:52 . I have about two more hours before they get home, two hours ...

I'm pretty sure that you're amazing. I love the tone of your voice! It's really very special; PLEASE KEEP WRITING AND SINGING. DON'T YOU DARE EVER STOP. Your lyrics feel ...

.... That's pretty much all to be said. Snoink's right, though; while the story is blatantly terrible, the narrator has a child-like innocence that I do enjoy. Even though the ...

“Becoming a bit overprotective, don't you think?” he asked and laughed. “I knew something was off when I could seem to take my life one single time.” Huh? This sentance ...

Mary leaned against a yellow car Just a yellow car? Be much more specific. Her yellow car? and studied the highschoolers high schoolers (space) pouring out of the Once again, ...

Why does my grandma always ask me to get her medicine? (...)