EnchantressMuffin

This was described well, except for one thing. Who did he lose? The style of your writing suggests that we, the readers, should know who he has lost, but I ...

This is good, and moving very nicely. An intriguing read, I would say if I am a high-class literary review, which I am not. I have to make this quick, ...

Um... what? I assume this is about a relationship, but I read it four times over and still don't get it. What am I missing?? I apologize for my idiocy. ...

Hey and welcome! I love your name! :D Feel free to PM me if you need anything, or just would like to have a conversation with long silences/gaps and pauses. ...

Hey and welcome to this forum thingy!! :) I collect stuff, too, but things like acorns or interesting bits of wood... I like shiny things, though, so I have a ...

I like the original version better. I like the questions, I like the stories, and I think that if you a) cut out the questions-answers lines, and b) cut out ...

Okay, first off, thanks SO much for PMing me when it was up! I enjoyed it, though there were a couple of things I noticed about the story: For the ...

Hey Kate and PsychicNinja! Have a smiley ----> :D Peace out! Love and chocolate! Muffin

Hi! I said I'd comment and here I am, commenting.... Well, this was a good story. Well written, if a bit matter-of-fact, and the story is intriguing. It does, however, ...

Hm... this was interesting. A little hard to understand at times. though. For instance, why does the man have blood on his clothes? Why is he chasing the woman? And ...

I liked this poem very much. It struck me as powerful, and emotional. I like poems like that, that grab me within just the first few lines. To the contrary, ...

*overuse of exclamtion points alert* Hey Caitlin! Welcome to YWS! I'm Muffin, but you can call me EM if you like. I live in southern California too! Awesome! Peace, love, ...

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This was a really good poem. I especially liked the "deepest dreams, darkest thoughts" line. Something about that was... electric. I think if you made this poem a smidge longer, ...

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