EnchantressMuffin

Heya! I'm Muffin, and I'm not a muffin. (For some reason everyone seems to think I am a muffin. I don't know why.) So, welcome. You sound pretty interesting, points ...

Hey! I'm Muffin. Welcome welcome welcome! Uh... since you didn't provide any information about yourself I'll guess I'll just have to spout some questions. So: What kind of music do ...

This was very wordy and didn't do a thing for me. You seem to be trying to sound very smart, and maybe you are very smart, but the way this ...

Well, for a first work, this was really good. It did seem a little long-winded without any stanzas or line breaks, so perhaps you could find a way to make ...

I've found another rambler! Yahoo! Anyway, though you're not new, welcome welcome welcome! Peace, love, chocolate, Muffin

This is awesome. Very sweet, very well-rhymed, and very touching. Great job. Ordinairily I'd say that the lines are a little long, but since you double spaced it that takes ...

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Thanks for all the critiques, guys. I trimmed it a little bit--took out the lines that had less relevance to the next line and so forth--but as I like it ...

Hm... This was all right. A little bit dry, a little bit tell-not-show. I personally didn't find it the most engaging thing to read, but then my tastes are weird. ...

I like this very much. It's very powerful, and the simplicity of your words only adds to the effect. I especially liked the first and last stanzas-- very strong, gets ...

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Do you wanna be a banana?

Hey! Not much to say, Jabber and Kitty pretty much said it all ready, but: Like Jabber said, you are improving. Yay for you! Your character development is moving nicely, ...

Okay, now I'm really posting. First off, I think that you should elaborate on the security that you mentioned. Just saying "overwhelming security" doesn't really bring to mind this great ...

"Awed" is a word, but not in that context. Muff