Emorykings

your poem was impressive i enjoyed reading it. the only thing that actually came to my notice was the "Because" used after a period in line 3 stanza 1. it ...

For someone who does not know much about poem I will say you tried. the way you used your words brief and bright. when writing a poem you have to ...

all has probably been said your ryhme in your last line and the shortness of the poem. What i expected when i saw the title is what i saw so ...

not much to say because much wasn't written. but i did enjoy what I read. only that I dont think that it should be "IN" in this line "The air ...

first of all the poem is not properly formatted and second the poem was too long at first i was enjoying it I had to force myself to finishing the ...

its a great poem i enjoyed it the only thing i see is that the poem is too jampack it would be enjoyable if there was some kind of spacing ...

actually as you said i would need an explanation to understand what you really meant but dont you think it will be more of a poem if I dont have ...

***clapping*** That was a lovely piece of poetry it was beautiful I enjoyed reading it especially your use of imagery, I have been working on a piece of after effects ...

The first three line was cool except for the period that followed after each To start. The next two lines that followed contained unecessary words like "letters and word" and ...

Here are you grammatical errors they are CAPITALIZE Firstly to start with there is no puntuations even when needed. I am sitting on THE BUS (the expression is not specific ...

unless the "doll" is refering to two different personallity you first two stanza "The baby doll sleeps until he picks her up and she dances with his feet and kisses ...

***clapping*** That was great I enjoyed it, it has been a long time since i've seen a poem with such intense comparison. You use of this personification amuse me especially ...

your poem was lovely I enjoyed the deep expression of feelings its difficult to express onces feeling in writing but I think this poem has something to do with what ...

tha was a great poem I enjoyed reading it your use of words your puntuations and the sense of self pity of the poetic character was great you did a ...

Your spacing is irregular and not needed. but in all this is how I feel your poem should look like hope you find it useful. An angel should be happy, ...