EmmaJane

This is only a quick review, so I'm sorry if i am a bit brief. Okay, I was a little confused with what was going on, but after reading it ...

Hey! Can i just say i think your story is brilliant so far. "If they were so keen to greet her before they’d even met her, how mad about her ...

This was great. It really caught my eye. Your writing and main character remind me of an author: Ellen Schreiber. You are a star with characterisation. i immediately got an ...

*** Please read 1 first! Thanks for all the comments - they've been really helpful. By the way, the tense is edited. And this is now chap two.*** Raindrops It ...

Oooh, nice. I love how you've centred it around "Once upon a time" Leaves us wondering what has happened to the character to make them so bitter and why they're ...

I like the start - it catches the eye. Kinda makes you think "Well, what IS wrong, then?" But, yeah, the "the only one she had ever slept in." could ...

*** Hi guys, this here is the second part of the chapter (only just combined the two as this used to be chap. two), so if you haven't read the ...

Your writing is completely riveting. I love how you start off so mysterious and then gradually you reveal to the reader what has happened. "I'm fucking furious that it was ...

Perhaps you could paragraph it? It looks a bit daunting to read if it's just a solid block of writing. Try and break it up a little. I know it's ...

Hi! This seems a promising start of a story, almost immediately the reader falls in love with Glen. Well, i do. I love his unusual character, his strange take on ...

Return She first appeared to me when I was nine. I was dreaming I was wandering in the middle of a golden field. The surrounding sea of corn waved lazily ...

***If you haven't read the first chapter I'd really appreiciate it if you read that before reading this. here's the link: Thank you!*** Chapter Two A Sudden Calling I woke ...

I grabbed Iena’s hand and pulled her away. With a cry she stumbled after me, clutching at my hand so hard it hurt. I pushed desperately at the heavy oak ...

The style of writing you have here is just as sensuous as Anne Rice's. I have yet to read Merrick so i have no idea who's point of view this ...

I quite like the twist of Iggy loving Max. Although i was "Forever Fang + Max" i quite like your idea of Iggy also feeling something for Max. I loved ...