EmmaJane

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm sorry, I only have time for a quick review so I'm just going to pick out a few points. Okay, this is very long. Perhaps ...

okay! It's been re-written. Not yet finished, but I didn't want to leave the other up for too long. Am going on holiday for a bit, but will be back ...

Hey, I was reading it again - as you do - and I noticed my error. *blushes* sorry. I tend to miss out words when I read... So take no ...

Oh, okay. Thank you! :)

Um, how do you delete a piece of work you no longer want anyone to read because it's awful? Like a chapter gone wrong or something. Thank you! ~ EmmaJane ...

Hey! The cliffhanger at the end - wow! Three. I heard a horn honk. The long, deep kind like a… Truck. Very nicely done. I love how you've separated "truck" ...

Okay, is this chapter keeping up with the ones before, or do I need to rewrite this one too??? I'm unsure. Please let me know what you think, even if ...

Heya people! Thank you all so much for your reviews - seriously they have all been great. And as you can probably tell from the number of times I've edited ...

Mmmm... I guess. I wasn't too pleased with it to begin with so I'll rewrite it. Also, I'm not too sure what the errors were - 'cause I'm unbelievably bad ...

There was someone in the wardrobe. Macey knew. She sat on her bed, hugging her knees to her chest. Nervously chewing her bottom lip, she never took her large, brown ...

Hey, That was amazing. You captured the sense of hopelessness and pain perfectly. It's quite moving. The start is perfect. I love the clown analogy. I quite like how you've ...

Ha ha! I love the ending and the way you are so descriptive about the hate-thing going on between Casper and Jamie. I can totally imagine it. “What’s eating you? ...

4. A Small Request I was once again in the golden field. I looked around myself in wonder, my mouth slightly open so I could breathe in the scented, sweet ...

3. Alonsa She was staring at me! She was in the mirror! My hand had uncovered most of her face and now she looked directly at me. What a fright! ...

Amusing. Okay, pretty funny. I have to admit - i think you've captured their personalities perfectly. :) "I command you too eat her!" Yes, i will be sad and point ...