EmmaJane

Hey! This was amazing. I loved the poetic-sounding language you used. I can't believe only one other person has reviewed this! Chatter erupted from their fallacious lips, reflected in the ...

Hey. :) This was very good. I think it's okay that you've gone for the best-friends-in-love thing. If everyone tried to be really different then they wouldn't really be different.. ...

Split it into two again because it was so long! Sorry it's so depressing ^^ um, just trying to portray how the loss of her father has affected her; how ...

6. A Renewed Promise My eyes flew open as I gasped. I jerked up into a sitting position so fast the room begun to spin around me. “Oh!” I put ...

Hey, random question - but this is what this place is for, really... What does the "dig this story" mean? Am just curious, lol. An urgent reply isn't really needed. ...

Aw! It was so sad! Poor girl! But it was also pretty good. You were great at getting her emotions across and explaining the relationship between her and her sister. ...

Hey :) Won't annoy you with yak about paragraphing. You've probably got the gist. Someone else speaks, new line. Yar? That's your main problem, sort that out and you're awesome. ...

Oh! cool, :D thank you so much! Will edit right away. :)

Hey people! Okay, whoever has been reading this and commenting you are a star! And those people who've commented on every chapter - I love you! (In a non-freaky way ...

5. Dearly Missed “Wake up!” I was rudely woken up by someone pounding on my bedroom door with their fist. “C’mon, Ames – get out of bed!” “It’s Saturday, Dylan!” ...

Ah. okay. Perhaps you could put the time (1875) at the start of the chapter, Like: Chasing Shadows Chapter I – Bloody Rose 1875 If you're writing in that time ...

Hey! 'Tis me again :) First off, can I say how much better it looked spread out and separated - no longer condensed into a couple of large paragraphs. Lots ...

Hey! Your Quote at the start really caught my eye. You shouldn't have moved it! :) Your writing is very sophisticated, perhaps a little too sophisticated. I felt it was ...

*Gasps* No one else has reviewed??! Fools, the lotta 'em. :wink: I'm going to irritate you now with my comments about paragraphing. *grins evilly* Okey doke. Right, I still think ...

I heard that noise again. “Because I have a story to tell. A story about myself. Because I shall remain in this state until someone listens to this story. If ...