EmilyofREL

Hi Sarah. Great Job...I like the description and imagery. Great job with that. I couldn't find anything really wrong. Just a few typos that have already been pointed out.

I was cracking up! Not crazy about them being gay, but hey. Some of the nit-picky things the second responder pointed out made the story for me. Like the description ...

Thanks guys. The majority of this is already written, I just have to decide how often to post. :) Glad you enjoyed it. and Bugbug, I agree this chapter needed ...

Wow. Great start. I like how you already try in the music thing by comparing the gum chewing to a symphony...there was another music mention in there...Sorry I don't remember ...

i agree. Interesting start but watch the typos. I like the idea of the "Children aged beyond their years". Maybe explain this more. What does their hair look like in ...

Shawn Why am I here? This is a question most people ask themselves at least once in their lives: Why am I in this world? What’s my purpose? I don’t ...

Can you post one chapter at a time or does it have to be all at once?