EmilyofREL

See there are twenty more chapters of this written so yes, their personalities are shining through! :)

Matthews: Thank you! I believe the numbers were originally in italics, but it changed it. Glad you liked it :) Sarah: I know WUTB kind of sucks right now. The ...

Just a little scene of imagery I wrote my English class. Opinions would be awesome! :) She titled her head back, feeling the wind rush over her ears and through ...

Haha lucky your dad's in English. My dad is an engineer! We bicker all the time cause he's so analytical and I'm so creative. I often write in first person, ...

I was sure I mentioned color guard earlier! I'll fix that. Is it important to know that Ryan is in band earlier than that? Medical terms: I'll work on that. ...

wow Sarah that's a lot of nit-picking :P It wasn't too harsh, just a lot to take in. I did tell you to be brutal. I re-read the chapter and ...

I have to agree. Your writing is always fantastic, Hayden. Can't wait to grab one of your stories off a bookstore shelf in the near future :)

Hey there Sarah! I'm not a grammar person, so I'm not gonna nitpick. Looks like most of your first editors got it anyways. Good start so far and leaves the ...

Hi Erin! Welcome to YWS. I joined just Friday, so I'm a newbie too. Can't wait to read some of your work and get some of your feedback too :)

Sad and descriptive. Manda mentioned it's lack of clarity, but I think the vagueness added to the emotion. It doesn't really matter who this man is, or how she got ...

It won't be hard. In fact, I think I did that later in the text. And the second suggestion will show up later on, but I will for sure explain ...

Thanks a ton! I'll be sure to try and explain things a little more. This was originally posted in a forum of people who understand diabetes, so not as much ...

Goodness this is adorable. This sort of modern South African/English society is interesting to me. I've read a few books with it and loved them. I'm anxious to know what ...

Great formslipper. and the answer is "yes!". Everyone's conflicts will come out shortly.

Brooklynn— Anna is having a low blood sugar—something we both know all too well. I’ve been a type one diabetic since I was nine. My pancreas shut down on me ...