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((I shall bring it back to life!!!)) Tamora I could see Ry's chest swell with pride out of the corner of my eye. "He was wise to contact me mentally, ...

Let's try again! My character looks like this: Oh, and nix the staff...

Very good. I love the story line and I found little-to-no flaws. Can't wait to read more!

I felt you used too many adjectives. For instance: A feeble stream of obsidian smoke rose from the decrepit body of the wheezing creature. Every other word is an adjective. ...

Mr. Tony, Ayumi and I told you what we thought about this character, and you wouldn't listen. There's no reasonable way someone can kill a person in a single glance. ...

((The baron's house?))

Me too! Name: Crystal Age: Looks about 20 (age unknown) Race: Elf Gender: Female Appearance: Long, silky, light-blue hair (to her knees), dark blue eyes, svelte figure (typical elf). Personality: ...

I'm with the above persons...

Not recently...

((Thanks Ayumi & Pie!!!)) Emi I explained the battle to Kakashi as we took to the canopy. Kakashi listened. Period. He didn't nod, or do anything, he just looked straight ...

Sharra I turned the corner and kept to the shadows. This was always the best part. Tonight, my eyes were set on the Amulet of the Baron Druheim. I'd have ...

"Hey!" I shouted as the boy sped away. I was tempted to follow, but I had business to attend to. "What a strange boy." I said, mostly to myself. The ...

I think it was Hidden Rain, Pie...

((We're not letting this die!!!))

I followed the boy, until I saw him lying on the street in front of a tall dark stranger. "Are you alright?" I asked kneeling down to check on the ...