Embee

Thank you guys so much for your positive feedback! And yes, MysticalBlood, you can save the first one. I agree that the ballerina is one: too grainy and two: too ...

I played around with the colors and came up with this. To me, it looks...futuristic? And a bit creepy. Some more Photoshopping with a little ballerina I had. That's my ...

Hey, this was pretty lengthy, but I read all of it. :D I really liked your main character; she seems well developed as of now, just make sure she changes ...

Hey, I think you have a very interesting history set up here. But, this was a little difficult to get through and in some parts, it felt too info dump-y. ...

Hey! Back again! Well, it took me a little bit to find some of the edits you made. I couldn't find anything about her husband in here though...maybe you should ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! His legs lay sprawled against the floor, his back against the wall. Would sound better as: His legs were sprawled out against the floor; his ...

Hey, I thought this was very well written. When I got to the middle, I kind of lost interest, but I didn't find any major grammatical errors. Are you? Yes. ...

I personally like how you don't use their names. It's a nice little piece, but you jump quickly from emotion to emotion. You need to have build up between the ...

Wow this is gorgeous! I used to do this with my pictures all the time. My only suggestion would be to fade the color of the crystal a little bit, ...

Hey, here as requested...except I got here too late. :| “What, missing you?” She was stunned at my response. “No, silly. Calling them urchins and filth! That’s really not the ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I definitely think you should continue and you should never give up writing; it doesn't matter who likes it and who doesn't. ;) Chief Nini ...

Hello Tomothy, my name is Embee and I'll be your reviewer for today. Dreadful weather, it seems to have been following me ever since that damn farmer noticed me hiding ...

Hey penprincess! To be honest with you, I couldn't get through this. I skimmed through most of it, but it was very long. Maybe you could break it down into ...

Hey and welcome to YWS! I completely agree with everything that Jane said. I think the friendship between the girls is very realistic, but you should give it more personality. ...

Hey! Just some nitpicks. :smt002 “NOAH!” a mass of blurred red curls screamed, as they came hurdling out of the old house, and into the lanky boy’s arms. Take out ...