EloquentDragon

Alright, so to comment on your newly added part (from the part where she reads the letter.): Your imagery was well done… "My head brushed against the pillow..." "My fingers ...

So, this is a good story, I only noticed a few things about the storytelling itself, so I'll be brief. First of all, your style is very brief and to ...

In response to your question on the authenticity of the characters names: Raul (which is actually spelled RAOUL) is a traditional French or Spanish name. Litzs is a northern European ...

So, first off I loved your story. Its short, but it is able to show the subplots and back-story of a real person's life out on the prairie. I noticed ...

All right, first off, I like the humor you added to the story, it adds a lot. Secondly, I'll deal with the grammar issues first: "Now run home and cry ...

Well hello, I really liked the way you begin this story, with the story about the man, dream catcher, and shop keeper. I would love to see a lot more ...

I loved your story, and although I cannot give as in depth critique as I would like, I will try my best to give you some pointers on grammar. I ...

Well Nike, this is a good start to your story, and opening with something that makes the readers ask a lot of questions and read more to find answers to ...