Elizabeth

'Heart beating crimson, scarlet, bloody, deep and raw and red" *Hurks!* So... much.... RED! THIS CREEPED ME OUT! Usually it takes a lot to do that but first I read ...

Everybody else pretty much got what was to be said... it was alright though. It was pretty and .... sort of depressing :P I liked it otherwise.

Three lines... barely any rhythm... barely any rhyme... Or forced rhyme.... Alright, there was some rhythm until this point: "a cat in a blunder makes an alliance, with the mouse." ...

Hmm.... You should really capitalize letters at the beginning of sentences, especially with the puncuation of periods.... but with a comma break you don't have to, understand? This sounds totally ...

I don't know why but I have the urge to say TOO MANY QUESTIONS! Honestly, in poems usually there are no questions or very little ones, and it's from the ...

"Space will come the living space Of the human race," ... What? OK... umm, what part of this would you need help with? What's the entire.... idea of this poem? ...

LOved the first stanza in rhyme and rythm.... but then it came to this: "The words and phrases stab me hard, My throbbing heart starts to bleed." Didn't really rhyme, ...

First off, (After a recent epiphiny) NO ideas are bad. They can be cliche or overused or underused or semi-used or badly worded or not worded enough or too worded, ...

It's very... bare... though I suppose that was the point of it... heh The coloring was scribbly but it was good in it's own way..... what else... Yes, and that ...

Thank you guys, I love you guys. I did work really hard on this so I appreciate it, really I do. Especially because it made glitter like it, though she ...

yes, I loved the poem itself.... i'm a bit tired so I didn't understand some thigns but... yes... lol... *Xanthan, nice signature* :P

yeah... fixing how you switch would help :P i tried 2 times....

I read a few just now, Doubt, those are beautiful... *steals your talent* I was blocked from the guestbook however *parents* but yeah... nice job :)

Thank you everybody *feels loved* Next year I'm taking French so believe me I'll need a lot of help on that.... But now it's all about Vampires and Latin :P

First off... punctuation Second... proper title Thirdly... didn't need to post it twice I couldn't read it because it was a giant clump.