Elizabeth

... Sir, I'm pretty sure that HE doesn't have the letter T in it....

"In only five short words Bare, ordinary," Wow.... bare and ordinary are bare and ordinary :P Wow... how... wow... this reminds me of a poem I wrote, thought mine was ...

LIGHTEN UP???? NEVER!!! then I'd be ugly Grey coloured :(

Sort of odd rhyming me with me though.... fix it up a bit, but otherwise it's ok.

Heh, I helped with this. I liked it still... but now I re-read it, no offense, but the rhymes still bug me a bit ...

I don't really have a meaning, and it was never going to go anywhere! Come on now. If you believe that then you shouldn't write at all. You just need ...

"And all the while i just am talking... " I just am... annoyed me. And you need to capitalize the I. "Get the attention all the time, it's turing into ...

AUGH! The rhyme meter went WAY AWAY from normal... it was 122 then it was 212??? i didn't really like it. I mean, no offense but it was too short ...

I think... I'm having.... a heart attack.... These are lke all the ones that people SHOULDN'T POST! We're writers, thus the name of the society. So write like one or ...

"Words and phrases cut me deep, And pierces and scratch my mind, They swarm around my head always, And sometimes make me cry." Better but.... pierces and scratches without the ...

I'm blinded! what's wrong with this? This totally sucks... I can't read in the early morning like this... thank god I posted about a billion times this morning before I ...

First off: Calm down. I liked this poem... it was nice and simple and it was pretty... and got to the point. Few errors as Xanthan and them said... but ...

No offense but: UUUUUUUGH. Why would you say bitch? It seems the character cared a lot to have called this other one a bitch. Selfish selfish... I already fixed one ...

Let's take it from the top! "The flame that surrounds me , like the fire in your eye" " Burns all around me [I wouldn't advise using me in this ...

This was too short lined for me, too choppy, too... Why? and How? And And! I mean, seriously, this would be a great story if you hadn't forced so many ...