Elizabeth

First off... I can't really read this Format it better... And what's with the periods before some words? Augh... ... ... the lines were too long, I thought this was ...

... Whoa... I think that this was... like, I don't know, something in the first stanza made me not want to read it but when I finished I was amazed, ...

Hmm... lexy: YOU'RE NAME IS IN THE POEM! :) That's cool. I wouldn't really call this iambic pentameter though. I forgot the definition from the Romeo and Juilet parody, but... ...

BETCH I SAID I NEEDED IT FOR YWS :p

(Takes the dark ages one) Love them :)

But…Just…how, dont't capital just. I am not sure, there was the mazimum of 3 words in a line... that sort of bugged me and the poem itself, sort of frightened ...

Of course Brad, I can't really critique but I kinda affree with Yellow Boy up there. I liked it though, of course it's nearly 6 AM in the damn mornign ...

I'm not really going to critique, I think that there were so many big words that I'm going to lose sleep over this... Heh. I enjoyed it... I especially liked ...

Apart of me Worries I lie upside down My head in the lake The waterfall above me Thundering My head submerged with Tainted bubbles surfacing I breathe no more Will ...

Well done. I'm doing a oice segment in my blog and I'm going to recite your poem FIRST :) It's like the writers alamanac on the classical music station here... ...

Sureal: Not a good time. I don't know... one of my friends committed suicide and I don't know how or why but.... this thing about the warm water and the ...

You words are like magic. You are welcome here. *Snapes fingers and disappears*

I'm totally have to relate to this poem because I'm so freaking nervous some of my family members are going to be drafted. Anything can happen now... This poem, although ...

Hmm... I really enjoyed this... I think that you do need to make the stanzas more than 2 or 4 lines by combining them... I really liked this... I rememebr ...

She's the only thing he see's Coming from the bathroom I think you should change that to ... see Is coming... Otherwise... wow, this is really ... wow. Beautifullly worded ...