Elizabeth

Well can't give that much of a useful critique at the moment but I'll come back.. If the rhyming is dodgy, then don't rhyme. The ending was a bit cruel, ...

Basically what Snoink and Brad said. I like all the words, but the lines equaled jerky and that's what basically made me stop reading... because I do not finish many ...

Gotcha: 1) Cut the wordplay 2) Cut off the capitalization and actually make sense 3) Cut the crap, all in all START TAKING POETRY STERIODS Goals in life: 1) INTEREST ...

Yea- this kid is in it for attention and brad. Just to let you know if you post anymore weird or random poems that don't really mean anything I won't ...

I remember back when clips with blood were rated for 13 and over XD I feel old. These were pretty good lol, better than anything I could ever do on ...

Um... I liked it, thought it was pretty cool, but then end ending totally threw me off.... from The entire last stanza to the very last line. I mean, who ...

"Emotions you feel are something" ... Something what? I think it has potential... I really do... but the rhyming dragged it down a bit, in my opinion and it seems ...

... Yeah. Whoever you are. I hope your mother cries when she reads this. What was this? This was not good. It was the opposite of great. It was a ...

Brad, you're cruel, God I love you. ... Feelingless? ... Seriously. Trash teh first 2 lines on the second and third stanzas.... I don't know, it had potential... but I ...

Well it's better, perhaps you could say WHY you felll into a dark hole... but otherwise it's pretty good. Keep it up or Draco gets it :P

What is it with you and cups of coffee? :P I'm sorry but I sort of imagined when the drinks collided that there was a guy getting his face burnt ...

WOw, I thought the first stanza was really beautiful! I think the last stanza was beautiful also but the lines kinda threw me off somehow... I don't know how but ...

I like pie too. In fact, I am damn pie queen. But this poem... stanked... Listen, we take writing seriously... so eitehr put up something decent or put this in ...

It's your first anything you posted here *Stalks you* hee hee.... ... This poem depresses me beyond be-damn-lief. I think you were too... ... ... you said You couldn't do ...

Grins... I know where some of the points came from :P