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This wasn't the first time I found myself looking down 15 stories off the ground, as the cold wind ruffled my damp hair. Most of the time you should spell ...

Walking up to the bar, I beckonded the tender over. Beckonded should be beckoned. Bowing low, he suffled to the side, and let me pass. Suffled should be shuffled. How ...

When I stared you in confusion, you just laughed. This should say, "When I stared at you in confusion..." You look at it and casually shrug. Look should be looked. ...

Because who cared if her descendents and the rest of the human race saw the end of Earth as long as she was six feet under when it happened. Descendents ...

I'm planning on doing at least five.

He look around, and noticed that he was on a beach! The exclamation point isn't needed. Instead of being in a normal position in the sky, it turned out to ...

I have redish, orangish hair with orangish, brownish clothing. Redish is spelled reddish and orangish isn't a word. I don't wear any armor because I beleive that heavy stuff such ...

This is a good beginning, but it is way too short. Prologues aren't suppose to be long, but they should at least be a few paragraphs, not a few sentences. ...

It looks like my-len to me.

Sorry. You should be able to see it now.

The stench from the Latrines is Latrines shouldn't be capitalized. over-realming and the rats are numerous. Over-realming is spelled overwhelming. All we are sleeping on is a group of wooden ...

Strangers In The Wilderness Eitan and his family had been driving through the vast expanse of destruction for over an hour and the scenery still hadn't changed. Burning smoking piles ...

People were dying everywhere, it didn’t seem fair for me The sentence should be split between everywhere and it . People say I shouldn’t care. You switched tense here. Either ...