EliteHusky

I found this very romantic in the sense that you brilliantly used writing in the second person to enable the reader to place themselves in the place of the female ...

We were speeding down an empty highway in Nevada or some such nowhere, our path lit by the stars and half-busted headlights. It was Rick Petty’s thing, these road trips. ...

Quite good. I especially liked your use of movement by "fingertips". Additionally, I found this section: Down toward the deep Glance above and see the sun] ...very beautiful in the ...

I do not believe the length of this piece should be held against you, but rather I take the approach that it is a testament to your commitment towards developing ...

Basilisks of Bellwood “Now we can do this my way, or the hard way,” Dante boasted, as he brought the man outside. “If anyone is stalking this house, let this ...

Greetings! I found this submission to be packed with emotion as exemplified below. I may just be frustrated, I may just be sad, But I don't care, I'm not the ...

It depends on perspective but for a politically correct figure... they look like they are thirty but everything is not as it seems (I'll let you create a list of ...

Poison David carefully eyed Anton as he rushed down the flight of stairs at the end of the corridor. He turned to step down, stopping as soon as he saw ...

Ask instead, why is poetry poetic,and why is life living? I am hesitant to call this a masterpiece because you used "poetry" and "poetic" side by side. It feels like ...

Thank you for your comment, changes have been made concerning basic punctuation. The flashback is not meant to be too revealing and key pieces information still remain temporarily hidden. Plus, ...

Smoke “Why did you even call him?” David asked his brother. “Diana had the car, why did you call Anton first.” Dante was caught by surprise. “Well… It’s just that ...

Great conclusion. The overall theme of depression was captured fairly well including your mention of feeling cold, the lack of living trees representative of energy and life, and the seemingly ...

Thus creating a tsunami of loss, and dread,nearly drowning my overwhelmed mind. Good use of imagery. like a punch in the guy Perhaps "gut". that never touched you eyes. "Your" ...

Thank you for your comment. Please feel free to point out those grammatical errors as sometimes, and I say this after reading the link you provided earlier, formatting issues can ...

Fighting with Demons David and Dante took turns recounting what happened. As they approached the part when the mufloni burst in and David jumped it with an improvised weapon in ...