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Hello Stripes, Overall I felt that the poem constructed an atmosphere reminiscent of Alice in Wonderland. That may sound strange, but granted I mean that as a complement. I really ...

I love the small hymns you created throughout this piece. Your detailed descriptions really made reading your story more enjoyable as I felt that I could possibly relate to some ...

*The following story takes place after the last episode of Season 4 with David Tennant as the Doctor. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ The Dalek Doctor --

Very good poem. It is often hard to establish a rhythm early on, and even harder to to establish one that attracts readers but this poem did establish one that ...

Hello, Great poem. What I really liked about this poem was the introductory smoothness. For example, you had rhymes that made sense, and the endings of each verse, because they ...

Please read Broomstick 8 Travel for more background The sky turned darkened as flashes of lightning encircled the group of students who had just departed from the Hungarian ship. Thomas ...

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Hello quietloud798, First of all, I thought that this work of fiction was filled with emotion. Despite the structure and formatting of some of the sentences featured, I liked the ...

Hello! Good introduction. The use of words such as "alien" really added the aspect of mystery and the unforseen, in your story. I like what you did for the following ...

The Sonnet CHAPTER 1 Jack of Canterbury hastily began sweeping away the crumbs that remained on his mother's kitchen table. He was always patient, but somehow the newly baked batch ...

Okay so far. You definitely have a storyline, which is good, although the plot appears a bit vague. After reading Viva LA Vida I and Viva LA Vida II, the ...

The Purple Paperclip There once was a purple paperclip Despite it’s location, it was quite pleased To the other utensils The Paper and Pencils, It was all they could do ...

As the Police officer ran along the crowded street of Holzner Road in London, she couldn’t help but think of what she was doing here. Just moments before, she was ...

Here is a continuation piece I'm working on, hope you find it somewhat exciting and thrilling although it is stilll in development meaning all comments and suggestions are welcome, as ...

The words of your poem coincide perfectly with the theme of fire, that is a pro. The only con that seemed to strike my mind was that as I read ...