EliteHusky

Great! Very poetic. I especially liked how you used the term "Sea Gulls" after the sentence containing "Sea rolls", blended very well. If I had to label this piece into ...

Interesting. Firstly when you said "Most others are running", I had to pause because the way that was structured is not very smooth. Suggested replacement would include "While others are ...

I will not criticize this piece on content, I have no right to. Whatever the subject matter is it is YOUR freedom of expression. I gave this a "Needs Improvement" ...

Good! I did enjoy your submission! The level of detail you used blended extremely well with that one repetition of "pounding". I’m tucked up in bed, so deliciously cosy. Nothing ...

First of all in regards to your ambition to send articles to a newspaper let me wish you good luck. As I read this piece I could not help but ...

Let me preface my reply by saying that I will be brutally honest, constructive, but honest all the same. I enjoyed this piece and it's poetic format. I especially liked ...

I am more than happy to share some of my thoughts regarding this entry. I froze as the scent of the hospital room entered my nostrils; clean, fresh and penetrating. ...

Good. This piece definitely has promise. One suggestion to help things go more smoothly would be swap the "the" from, The flock to a ""They". In the second paragraph when ...

Dear Watson, It is with sincerest apologies that I tred upon your fragile time in the Amazon Rainforest. You may remember a while back when I told you how I ...

Hello! Despite the plot being short I really liked the sense of urgency it evoked. I've had some experience character building before so I hope this helps as a potential ...

Hello! Great photographs. Overall the last one was my favourite, largely due to the fact that is was crooked and made me imagine an injured ant trying to balance properly ...

Hello! Very interesting plot line. Some of the material, specifically the bit about killing the homeless, were a bit disturbing but I imagine there was an element of comedy involved, ...

James McKay opened his eyes, after being lulled into a deep slumber by the loss of energy often associated with furious exercise. His room was no longer a dark shade ...

Captain Jack Harkness couldn't help but feel a little uneasy as he balanced driving his black Mazda 3 Sport while maintaining a careful eye on the glass compass that lay ...

Very Good. The storyline was interesting to follow and your dialogue was exceptional. “N-nothing,” I replied nervously and stepped closer, staring at the boy. One of the things I liked ...