EliteHusky

Like an object in space, I find myself coming back every few months or so to add or review. Cheers.

Excellent. You maintained the theme throughout the entire piece and wrote with in a coherent style. I especially liked your uses of imagery. Here are some favourites, s like navigating ...

Good start. I stumbled when it came to reading this line, Then examined the jagged edges, to see what lied there Usually when referring to the past tense it would ...

First of all, fantastic title. Secondly, equally strong conclusion. Throughout your poem you poured out your vision of a perhaps nightmarish Utopian society reminiscent of Brave New World . Yet, ...

Aaron, Jeremy, and April sulked to the truck. Jasper didn’t really seem to mind the news as much as them. It’s probably because he’s already graduated and he’s not leaving ...

A world of desert lands, Whose soulless sands devour every boy, Even those that had no single toy, Every finger, every hand that twitched, Every nail and every foot that ...

the true pain would be the events that happen before death I like this line. Annaria created her own riddle that not even she can figure out This gives good ...

“Oh my god. It’s not funny. Stop laughing, you’re horrible,” she says, and she looks at me with utter disgust. I realize now why my cheeks ache. They’re paralyzed from ...

Portal to another world Which can be entered but never fouled For while this gateway exists Someone on at least one side always persists That you do not break it… ...

Portal to another world Which can be entered but never fouled For while this gateway exists Someone on at least one side always persists That you do not break it… ...

Having read your "spoiler" where you criticized the work, let me point out some positive observations. You demonstrate a wide vocabulary and write with a level of detail that adds ...

This caught my attention, not because of the lack of reviews but because of the strong emotional outpouring you wrote that consisted of hating a great many things. I cannot ...

and laughed in his car, as I shifted it’s gears Correction: "it's" should be "its" as "it's" = it is. Overall, I liked how you channelled your creativity to make ...

Good start. Your conclusion stayed on topic and the overall theme was not too cluttered. I also liked your use of strong language or at least language that brings a ...

The young woman was free, and I- a man of six and twenty years- was a prisoner of wrong love. Antiquated way of referring to the character's age but I ...