ElisaDonut

Wow..this was.....well, to fit the title, dark. And it had an overbearing sense of dread that really spiced up the story. The part about sacrifice was really powerful and I ...

Hahahaha! I loved this! :) It made me laugh. Tammy Toast...Wanda Waffle....Knisley Knife......haha, the idea is awesome. I want to read morrrrrrrre! xD

I like this! The emotion and feeling of the moment is really well shown here! I think if you added more, this story would only get better and better :) ...

YESSSS. I love that series. It made me laugh and was, pretty much, the first epic series I ever read that wasn't sappy. Bartimaeus is one of my all-time favourite ...

Wow! I really love the dark tone of this writing. It seems so realistic and morbid. I think it was really well written for its short length - however, I ...

...............Wow. This is powerful......it's really quite well written - save for the format, i think it reads rather like a poem, but other than that, I didn't see many grammatical ...

Thanks for your crit. Yeah, I agree with the personality and abrupt ending - i'll try to think of something better to fit. And I'll try to make it less ...

I loooooove this.

Please write more. I want to read about the Brooklyn Bridge falling, and I want to see more of Ahmed. He's my favourite character of the two.... I love the ...

This was really well written, even though it's short! You had some extra commas here and there, but I loved the conflict with the little sister and the chains concept...great ...

This was an assignment for Computer Applications at school. We had to take a "starter sentence" and write a story from it...I hope you enjoy! He was the most unusual ...