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Re: The Speed of Light (Prologue and Ch. 1)
I loved the opening! It pulls you directly into the story. I won't bother going over the grammar issues but one point that bugged me half to death was when ...
Jan 10, 2011 -
Re: Lightheart - Chapter 1 - Part 2
I ended up reading this. It flows well and its ending of it prompted a smile. The situation is so normal that the reader can relate easily to Carmen. With ...
Jan 9, 2011 -
Re: Lightheart - Chapter 1 - Part 1 (Edited)
Though I've noticed several other reviewers making comments about the first line, I quite like it. I don't know whether it was on purpose or not but it seems to ...
Jan 9, 2011