Elelel

None of them sound blokey to me. Bawl - babyish Bemoan - it sounds alien to me. So if you've ever got an alien crying I'd go with this one. ...

You'd think there'd be an bloke sort of word for crying. "weep" and "tears" and all those other words sound way to girly.

It occured to me that I've mentioned several times that I skim or skip things in books, and then stand up for my right to do so. Lots of people ...

I was going to suggest something like what someone else said, where you describe the tears. The guys I've seen cry tend to also be very very angry. Probably pretty ...

I never seem to have much trouble with plots, but naming ... *shudder* I can do it for real names. Like, for people with names in our world. One day ...

Hello, I'm El. *everyone chorus's: Hello El!* And I have a tendancy to skip large blocks of text, especially dumpings. *cries of "it's okay" and "everyone skips thing sometimes* And ...

You see, most evil characters start off good. Some of the greatest mass murderers of history started off from humble origins and did murder in the name of the better ...

Yes! The blogs are the answer to all the big questions of life!

And just talk to guys. I can't see many of the guys I know giving you deep, meaningful insites into themselves and their minds ... at least not without giving ...

You're saying what you did to it a lot. Like "I sewed" and so on. I don't know ... that gets to me. Like you're not describing what they guy's ...

Well, if you ask me you've got to tell it like you're talking to the audience while bouncing up and down doing hand signals with the excitment of it all. ...

Yeah, I'm with Smaur on this one. What I noticed about it's annoyingness was not the adjectives but the way the sentences was put together. The conjunctions and whatnot. I'm ...

Do you still want my tips then? Well, you can have them anyway. You're saying what you did to it a lot. Like "I sewed" and so on. I don't ...

I think you'll scare more critiquers away with longer posts than with shorter ones ... but I don't really know how long chapters ought to be, because you can really ...

Well, get a huge rock or a large piece of furniture and put it behind the door instead. After all, you're not locking it, are you?