Elelel

It was like a Dragon mouth it really was. It was like a dragon's mouth, it really was. But one thing struck Edward as odd why was there cinder marks ...

Yeah, it's good, very mysterious (but I'm not going to vote) and yes, you need to check over your grammer. I'll give you some of the grammer mistakes I spotted... ...

I'll critique your work, I'm sorry about snapping over your critique of Happy Lizards work. I'll try to make it up to you. My first response after reading this was, ...

I think you said all I was going to point out, so im not going to say it all again, but its a good start honestly, a few typos, could ...

Sister dearest, I have been awaiting this moment for a long time. *grins evily* Lakki ran. Nice start, well, I think so anyway. The wind whipped past her ears, blowing ...

Punctuation is your friend. () . , ? " " etc. etc. etc. Spell check too. Use that. Please, for the love of all that is holy. That was not ...

Ghni. (don't ask, it's just something I say when I'm pleased with myself)

Yeah, I'm like Crysi, if I don't know what's going to happen I add bits as the ideas come (and boy do they come ...) and eventually I have no ...

Oh, I've read some discworld books. I really like them. I was kind of thinking square shaped for mine, and not on four elephants which in turn stand on a ...

Oh, one thing though, when you say make them ugly: Yes I agree with that, but don't make them worry about it all the time, like have them look in ...

I don't know where this fits really, here will do because it's writing related. I've had some pretty obssessive geography teachers for the past few years, and learnt a bit ...

Me? I use the phone book. I decide what letter it should begin with by the first name, and then I go search through that section of the phone book ...

Are the white dragons Crysi's parents? Cos that was kind of obbvious for me ... I'll delete that if I was right and you want me to. Anyway ... well, ...

*grins* it's the small people who are the most dangerous, people underestimate them and they have more to prove. I'm a shorty. But yeah, violence is a last-resort, defensive measure.

Yeah, add an age warning. Eek. I would NOT want my 11-year-old sister reading that... OMG!!! My sister too!!! She's a member and she's only 11 ... Thank you for ...