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When I borrow, I do just what you said you did and the borrowed thing eventually becomes so obbviously glaring that I just can't continue and so I don't, feeling ...

Well, if the hidden character did something important when they were first introduced, then when they come back the other characters probably would make a big deal of it. But ...

I've always thought of a smart person as someone who can think quickly and understand things. When I say think quickly, I don't mean as in speed maths or anything ...

:smt048 :smt041 :smt038 :smt040 :smt026 :smt026 :smt026 :smt026 :smt035 :smt064 :smt117 :smt113 :elephant: YAY!!!

Well I know that some guys in my class wear briefs because there was a huge wedgie war last year. It was entertaining ... but rather ... odd ... and ...

YAY!!! Maybe people should do these more!

Well, there's not really much, if anything, I can say that Crysi hasn't already covered, but I'll give it a go. First up, I enjoyed your piece. I liked the ...

It's probably best not to dump detail all that often. And I would not make a description of one character go on for pages and pages. Have a look at ...

The Lord of the Flies *shudders*

WHat a few other people have said about personalised endearments is probably the only thing I can say. I mean, I get "Lucy pops" from reletives a fair bit (repeat ...

I found it! Recent Literary Additions ... tee hee. First up, I like the idea that summer's just a mind set. That seems true to me, and you described the ...

It's not just hany for romantic fiction either!

YAY!!! Australia! The red rugged earth ascended steeply, piercing the blue sky like a bloody dagger through soft velvet. I like this imagery. I'm not sure about the word "ascended" ...

I found this very enjoyable. Mabe you could space it out more? With actual spaces between paragraphs or something? The mass of the text is a little daunting. It wasn’t ...

I think I'd better refrain from commenting on the Bush/demon aspect. I'm not American so it's probably not really polite for me to join in. There were a couple of ...